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The Ominous Blood

Since her childhood, she had been very brave. Unlike the other kids who would cry on seeing the first palette of blood she would press her wound hard and let it ooze faster. She somehow reveled in the blood-y flow, as if some witch was trying to purge a part of her soul and she had surrendered completely to it. Every time she would cut herself, she would wait for the gush and wish it never stopped and drenched her to the last drop.

Always surprised listening to the wonders of being related by blood, she would ask herself if those blood-kins had blood any thicker, because she was sure hers must have thinned.
Every time she would see a girl walking by along with his father giggling, happy, she would turn around and blade herself wishing she could change the blood flowing inside her. It was her blood’s fault if not hers; she was convinced. She even dreamt of getting fanged by the vampires. Looking for solace at any place,  she surmised who better than those kindred spirits in her dreams. 

She was getting by unnoticed; just a weird girl with unusual infatuation with blood. But, nothing was working for her now. Devastated she already was, so when she was possessed against her wishes this time, she turned around and slashed the same blade into his heart this time. And with every drop of blood that effused from his heart she felt a fresh drop replacing the bad ounces inside her. The charade unveiled. She could feel every drip inside her and she had never felt better. She was sure she was going to love this new color of her blood.
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This is my response to the Trifecta weekly challenge, which is to write a 33 to 333-word response using the following word/definition:
BLOOD: (a) lifeblood; broadly : life; (b) human stock or lineage; especially : royal lineage <a prince of the blood>; (c)relationship by descent from a common ancestor : kinship; (d) persons related through common descent : kindred; (1)honorable or high birth or descent (2) descent from parents of recognized breed or pedigree

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  1. brudbergMay 7, 2013 at 5:28 PM

    Ahh this was dark, but I can feel the hint of bad abuse... love the ambiguity.

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    1. ShreyaKashyapMay 7, 2013 at 11:27 PM

      Yea you guessed it correct ! Abuse at hands of someone with the same blood.
      Glad you liked it Bjorn :)

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  2. AnonymousMay 7, 2013 at 7:52 PM

    She killed someone, but I still have sympathy for her. I feel like she is acting out on things that have been done to her (or I'm soft and am giving her too much credit...I don't know :))

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    1. ShreyaKashyapMay 7, 2013 at 11:29 PM

      I feel it was necessary for her to do so in order to save the last bit of sanity that remained ... She had to act out !

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  3. Lyssa MedanaMay 8, 2013 at 2:46 AM

    This sounds like such a sad, desperate remedy. LM x

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    1. ShreyaKashyapMay 8, 2013 at 8:26 PM

      Yea, indeed it was ! Thanks for stopping by Lyssa :)

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  4. AnonymousMay 8, 2013 at 3:06 AM

    What a sad, dark piece. She feels like such a haunted character.

    Beautifully written.

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    1. ShreyaKashyapMay 8, 2013 at 8:29 PM

      Yes, haunted since she was a child ! But never complained just kept to herself. But there's only enough she can take ... So glad you liked it :)

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  5. AnonymousMay 8, 2013 at 2:42 PM

    What is left unsaid complements this flash. Kudos.

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    1. ShreyaKashyapMay 8, 2013 at 8:32 PM

      Thanks Yarnspinnerr :)
      She herself is living an ambiguous life. She never knew it was not her destiny the things that happened to her. She never knew to bail out until today!

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  6. Thomas Charles MacInnesMay 8, 2013 at 7:48 PM

    In canada, where I live, we are experiencing something called Mental Health Week. There are lots of news stories about mental health issues and lots of focus upon recognizing the signs of someone in distress. Self-mutilation is certainly a sign that all is not well. I think that you did a fabulous job of showing your character a lot of respect. You did not treat her as if she was a monster or a cartoon or somewhat less-than-whole. She is, very much, a real, multi-dimensional character. You should be proud of having crafted a character so life-like, flawed, real.

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    1. ShreyaKashyapMay 8, 2013 at 8:37 PM

      Thank you for such kind words Tom ... It has been my belief for a long time that being who the person is depends mostly on what they have faced in their lives(leaving aside the bitches and the dogs). So before we judge them, we should ask who are we to judge them? Do we even have any right to criticize them? So, I made her from her own perspective without any prejudice. So glad you liked it :)

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  7. DraugMay 8, 2013 at 8:06 PM

    This is quite raw and a little sad. Well done.

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    1. ShreyaKashyapMay 8, 2013 at 8:39 PM

      Thanks Draug :) ! I have been hearing a lot of 'sad-s' now though !

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  8. TrifectaMay 10, 2013 at 10:08 AM

    What she must have gone through to get to that place. Creepy.

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    1. ShreyaKashyapMay 10, 2013 at 10:58 PM

      Yes ... something very unbearable ! Beyond acceptance ... Thanks trifecta for reading :)

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  9. kymmMay 10, 2013 at 1:11 PM

    Reminds me of the warning not to cross your eyes. Some things should not be toyed with for the way they end up engaging you...

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  10. ShreyaKashyapMay 10, 2013 at 11:04 PM

    What she went through one can never even think of imagining the pain ! Some things should be left untouched... you are right! There is no word such as sympathy in situations like these.
    Thanks Kymm for reading :)

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