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Was she the luckiest?

Woke up just to find ‘twas a dream,
Drenched in the ecstasy of loneliness.
But he was nowhere to be found.
Tears in her eyes,
She knew she had defaulted.
Again.
How could she face them all without him?
Selfish, had she been again?
Not sure!
Opened her windows.
Desperately waiting for a  sun to dawn.
But a mirage featured,
Because  it was too good to be true.
Sitting on the curb was her man,
Her soulmate!
Scampered she to apologize,
Just to find him with his arms wide opened.
Surprised, was she the luckiest? 


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This is my response to the Trifecta weekly challenge, which is to write a 33 to 333-word response  using the following word/definition:
ECSTASY (noun):  trance; especially: a mystic or prophetic trance



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  1. PirateApril 22, 2013 at 10:20 PM

    A glorious moment of luck! Not sure if loneliness is ecstasy, but a clever use of language.

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  2. PirateApril 22, 2013 at 10:22 PM

    ps..If the captcha could go...!

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    1. ShreyaKashyapApril 22, 2013 at 10:37 PM

      Taken care of ... Thanks for pointing it out :)

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  3. PriyaranjanApril 22, 2013 at 10:55 PM

    Awesome Piece... :)

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  4. AnonymousApril 22, 2013 at 10:55 PM

    she seems to be among them... :)

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    1. ShreyaKashyapApril 23, 2013 at 5:19 PM

      I don't think I understood ... Thanks for reading :)

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  5. brudbergApril 23, 2013 at 12:21 AM

    Very sweet ... loneliness no more

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    1. ShreyaKashyapApril 23, 2013 at 10:50 AM

      Nobody should be alone ... even when they are frequent defaulters ... Thanks Bjorn for reading :)

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  6. Whispering ThoughtsApril 23, 2013 at 6:50 AM

    Great writing

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  7. DraugApril 23, 2013 at 7:54 AM

    Ah, a happy ending. Good for her!

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  8. AnonymousApril 23, 2013 at 9:57 AM

    So glad it wasn't too late, and he was open to reconciliation!

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    1. ShreyaKashyapApril 23, 2013 at 10:51 AM

      No matter what happens, he will stand by her side. No matter how cranky she grows up to be ... Thanks Janna for reading :)

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  9. UnknownApril 23, 2013 at 2:27 PM

    Ah, great writing! Reminds me of Stumblin In .

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  10. ShreyaKashyapApril 23, 2013 at 3:06 PM

    Thank you Vivek ! You might just have led me to listen to it ! :)

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  11. TrifectaApril 24, 2013 at 6:32 AM

    Drenched in the ecstasy of loneliness is a great line.

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  12. AnonymousApril 24, 2013 at 2:33 PM

    grt shreya...:)

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  13. UnknownApril 24, 2013 at 4:34 PM

    Beautiful story/poem, and thank goodness for a happy ending. Loved the syntax, did I not.

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    1. ShreyaKashyapApril 24, 2013 at 5:24 PM

      Ahh it sure is ... World deserves happy endings ! Thanks Thomas for the lovely comment :)

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  14. Valerie BoersmaApril 25, 2013 at 5:09 AM

    "Desperately waiting for a sun to dawn. "

    What a gorgeous line! It totally captures her feeling of loneliness! And then, that wonderful, happy ending!

    This was so beautiful!!

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  15. ShreyaKashyapApril 25, 2013 at 9:39 AM

    Thanks Valerie for such kind words :)

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  16. ReneeApril 25, 2013 at 7:01 PM

    I like the context of the prompt. Her distress was well portrayed, as was her joy at seeing her soulmate waiting.

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    1. ShreyaKashyapApril 26, 2013 at 11:57 AM

      Thanks Renee for reading ... So glad you liked it! :)

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  17. AnonymousApril 25, 2013 at 8:44 PM

    That line, "the ecstasy of loneliness" is very haunting. Indeed, it must be a very lonely state. Nice writing!

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    1. ShreyaKashyapApril 26, 2013 at 11:59 AM

      Yea haunting it is ... So glad you approve of it ! Thanks for reading kdillmanjones :)

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