Was she the luckiest?
Woke up just to find ‘twas a dream,
Drenched in the ecstasy of loneliness.
But he was nowhere to be found.
Tears in her eyes,
She knew she had defaulted.
Again.
How could she face them all without him?
Selfish, had she been again?
Not sure!
Opened her windows.
Desperately waiting for a sun
to dawn.
But a mirage featured,
Because it was too good to be
true.
Sitting on the curb was her man,
Her soulmate!
Scampered she to apologize,
Just to find him with his arms wide opened.
Surprised, was she the luckiest?
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This is my response to the Trifecta weekly challenge, which is to write a 33 to 333-word response using the following word/definition:
ECSTASY (noun): trance; especially: a mystic or prophetic trance
A glorious moment of luck! Not sure if loneliness is ecstasy, but a clever use of language.
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ReplyDeleteI don't think I understood ... Thanks for reading :)
DeleteVery sweet ... loneliness no more
ReplyDeleteNobody should be alone ... even when they are frequent defaulters ... Thanks Bjorn for reading :)
DeleteGreat writing
ReplyDeleteThanks Ruby :)
DeleteAh, a happy ending. Good for her!
ReplyDeleteThanks Draug for reading :)
DeleteSo glad it wasn't too late, and he was open to reconciliation!
ReplyDeleteNo matter what happens, he will stand by her side. No matter how cranky she grows up to be ... Thanks Janna for reading :)
DeleteAh, great writing! Reminds me of Stumblin In .
ReplyDeleteThank you Vivek ! You might just have led me to listen to it ! :)
ReplyDeleteDrenched in the ecstasy of loneliness is a great line.
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Deletegrt shreya...:)
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DeleteBeautiful story/poem, and thank goodness for a happy ending. Loved the syntax, did I not.
ReplyDeleteAhh it sure is ... World deserves happy endings ! Thanks Thomas for the lovely comment :)
Delete"Desperately waiting for a sun to dawn. "
ReplyDeleteWhat a gorgeous line! It totally captures her feeling of loneliness! And then, that wonderful, happy ending!
This was so beautiful!!
Thanks Valerie for such kind words :)
ReplyDeleteI like the context of the prompt. Her distress was well portrayed, as was her joy at seeing her soulmate waiting.
ReplyDeleteThanks Renee for reading ... So glad you liked it! :)
DeleteThat line, "the ecstasy of loneliness" is very haunting. Indeed, it must be a very lonely state. Nice writing!
ReplyDeleteYea haunting it is ... So glad you approve of it ! Thanks for reading kdillmanjones :)
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